All right Sam, read us a page and then we will go Veronica-ward around the room.
>> All right, I'm taking the central portion of page four, section Marsha.
[NOISE] Everyone should meet someone.
If you're lucky, that someone should make you want to kill for them.
To do anything for them.
That girl, the girl you love, she's everything and you're a chap.
Every time you see her, should take you back to the first time walking down Smith
while you drink Espresso at bar 2Bok.
You lift your gaze up from the table and slowly let it rise to meet hers.
Suddenly, the mailman a few steps behind her, and
the dog walker near your outdoor table slowly fade to nothing.
The stop signs blithely melt into spinning dallos, and each step she takes rings
a single bell sounding an angelic melody that drifts over the asphalt and
coats a turbulent Brooklyn block in a glowing white shimmer.
It is like seeing the sun for the first time.
I Isley brothers whose at lady plays in your head as the espresso in the wooden
table in the tusken red canvas barrier marking the restaurant's plotted sidewalk,
all sync into a infinite sea of useless memories of a time before she existed.
And that is all I'm reading.
>> Thank you.
Veronica.
>> I especially like the portion that Sam just read.
I had read this part before, it's nice if you'll read it.
I think the first time that I had seen it, I was concerned by the different types
of nouns that are the subject headings but now there was a little confusion.
I wish it was more standardized, because some are times of the day,
some are places, some are people's names, and that was confusing.
But I thought that it jumped around in time in a way that was really interesting
and it didn't confuse me.
I felt like we knew we started at the end, and then we got the back story, and
I felt that was handled really well.
And I liked the characters.
>> I agree.
I thought the sections and
like the breaking up of the story was like very well done.
Although I did not like the section headings because I felt
disoriented by them.
And in terms of the characters, I thought
maybe a little more description could be had about Martha other than her looks.
I think it would help to know who she is, and
what are her personality traits so that I can understand
the deception and the cheating a little bit more.
And I also, alongside that, I would like to see Bo
a little bit more in love with her in the earlier times,
there's just descriptions of like how she looks and
she's beautiful but, I feel like he's not invested in her,
especially because they haven't talked in several weeks,
up until the cheating incident.
So it seems like well, then why did he get so upset if they're not even talking?
But yes, I did love, I love the story I love the idea of
a travel channel chef setting fire to a house.
And in terms of the line level, there was a lot of punctuation errors in terms of